So, I have been with my doctor, my master and keeper, for what seems like ages. I thud up the bright, white corridors for hours every day seeing the same old sights. Metal beds on wheels glide past me, the water from mops swish around my sole. This was, until one day, I was put in a dark place and carried high up, jostled around. It was exciting but a little scary too. I missed the comfort of those hospital corridors. After what seemed like days of silence, finally I could hear the faint sound of music, it was getting louder. The music sounded happy, jaunty and lively. Strange things were happening to me, I wanted to move. As my master pulled me from the dark place, I looked around in awe. There above us, hanging proud, a beautiful silver glitterball. Below me, a smooth, shining wooden floor. As I took my rightful place on my master’s feet, I felt movement unlike any other. I tapped, glided and stomped. I felt alive.
Taken from the memoirs of Dr. Shoe, accessory to Dr. Ranj, participant in Strictly.
Jamie, this is stunning writing, well done! I love how you have personified Dr. Shoe and put the ‘memoirs’ at the bottom of the writing, as it complements the piece. I wonder what the other shoe from the pair feels like, do they feel the same way? The way you vary your sentence length as well as use alliteration is great. I want to say separate into two paragraphs, but it works well as it is. Great writing Jamie. I expect to buying your books soon! (hope you have an illustrator in mind!)
Jamie, I loved this. It’s an ORRsome piece of writing. Truly inspired! Not only have you personified the shoes, you have created a little piece of ORR and wonder taking the shoes’ journey through the hospital onto the dance floor.
I especially liked, ‘As I took my rightful place on my master’s feet, I felt movement unlike any other. I tapped, glided and stomped. I felt alive.’ Tap dancing is an incredible feeling. I had to learn to tap dance for a stage perfORRmance several years ago. It was one of the most challenging things I have ever had to do. I love the sound the tele-tone taps make on the floor. I hope Dr Ranj gets to read this.